Friday, 22 June 2018

Adrenalin writing

Adrenaline writing - Sam Pilgrim


Pushing my bike across the rocky,dusty dirt track.Thousands of fans standing, cheering. I’m flying up the ramp like a soaring eagle,flipping my bike round  three times. My wheels hit the dirt as the next ramp comes in to sight. I do a triple fronty. I hit the dirt my hand slipping off the handlebars. I get the speed wobbles, my back wheel slip out from underneath me. I crash but get up. I power on hit the last ramp, I do a tail whip and land by my mates.  


Coasting down the bumpy track. Speeding up the massive jump, tail wiping to the other side, wheeling over a pile of concrete. Pulling off a 360 off the end, As I perform the next jump I let go of the side of the bike, I fly over the shingly gully with no hands doing a massive jump with full extension. The roar of the crowd fills my ears as I cross the finish line.

Charlie Denton

4 comments:

  1. Kia ora, I am _cory from Makauri School.
    I really liked that you used really good words
    I learnt that your learning about murray ball
    Maybe you could explane more about your learning
    If you would like to see my learning visit my blog here

    Mā te wā
    cory

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  2. Thank you Cory,
    I really enjoyed reading your helpful comment.
    I enjoyed studying Murray Ball because he is a great artist and his comics are funny and interesting. He also lives on a farm like me.

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  3. Kia ora, I am ollie mac from Makauri School.
    I really liked your story about motorcross and I also think you are going to be a nitro ciurcus fmx star too.
    I learnt alot about murray ball and motorcross.
    Maybe you could of told us a little bit more about you and you family eg-your mums job and your dads job.
    If you would like to see my learning visit my blog http://makauriolivermac.blogspot.com/

    Mā te wā
    ollie

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    1. Kia ora Ollie,
      Thank you for replying to my blog.I enjoyed visiting your blog and enjoyed reading your writing.
      I love rugby and I am in Ngatapa green U 10 rugby team.I also enjoy hunting and go to archery to learn how to shoot a bow, I am using a recurve bow at the moment but would like to use a compound bow soon. I have 2 sisters and 1 brother. My mum is a teacher and dad is a farmer.
      What sport do you enjoy? What do your mum and dad do as a job? Do you have brothers and sisters?

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